First Draft Presentation and Feedback

Seeing as our piece is a comdedy, the main object was to make the audience engaged and to get them laughing. In this way the project succeeded, as on the planned occasions our classmates found it funny. However, from a technical point of view there were still many areas to improve.

The majority of the feedback was about how to clip the scenes together in a more seemless manner, so that the match on action is correct, and the storyline doesn't appear to jump from point to point. There were also luckily no jump cuts with any of the film stitching.

The voiceovers were also said to be the item that brought the piece together, however, the ection where the lip sync is off is visible to a majority of the class. However, there are other things that need our attention at this point, and so we may not be able to get around to recording it again.

There were also a lack of titles. We decided to add these at the end as the main title itself is planned to appear at the very end of the opening, so it only made sense to do it in this manner. There were one or two voice-overs that needed to be added or clipped, and so this will be fixed by the time the final cut is made.

With the poor lighting in the section where a low angle shot is used, we did our best to manipulate this and make th lighting more balanced. We increased the gamma, and then the contrast so the colours din't look too washed out. This worked to an extent, although it was still brought up that the lighting could have been better in this section, and it needs a little further manipulation to make sure it doesn't look out of place.

The music we were told fitted well and was turned down at the correct points to allow the voiceovers to be heard. Without the voiceovers the piece would have been no-where close to it's initial impact. There is a section in which Enrice' Estavan Julio bumps into Jimmy and says 'Get out of my way.' At this point the music stops completely, and it was said that this seemed very unnatural, and broke the flow of movement. The sounds of the filming are should also be muted at this point, as the birdsong and noises of nearby cars take a surprising amount of impact away from the impression that this section is supposed to carry.

The mise-on-scene was said to be a uncontrolled in the ways that it didn't fit the story line as well as it could have, and the danceposter looks out of place on a black, white wall. I agree that he mise-on-scene was lacking, especially in the way of Sam's costume that we didn't organise properly, but with the dealine nearing we decided that the mise-onscene- would have to stay as it was, as we felt the other positive aspects of the piece far outweighed the need to film multiple scenes again.

With the deadline a few days away, we are very close to finishing comfortably within the alotted time, and having the video file exported. We agree that the project has the potential to end very well, but we are also wondering what things about it may be holding us down, or any unforseen major problems may arise in the final days of editing. All we can do now is hope for the best, and keep saving as we edit.